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sometimes i wonder
if it's really true--

if history really does just
repeat
& repeat
& repeat.

and now we're stuck in its loop where
you're holding everything back
and i'm holding everything in.

and there's nothing to do,
but hope for the best
or at least something better.

but for now, i just wonder
if there's anyone else
who misses quite as much
as i do.

it's never enough to remember,
but it's always too much
to forget.
when i'm done thinking.
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TsamiTsunami Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, there is so much emotion in this, and you've expressed it so well... The lethargy that comes with a relationship that's going nowhere--I can almost feel it just by reading this. So moving, and so very well done. ^_^
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ValynAporia Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2012
I love the way this flows.
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Jun 16, 2012   Writer
Thanks!
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shortwings Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012
Oooh. I really like that last paragraph.
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thenewzerohero Featured By Owner Feb 25, 2012
What a fantastic poem! For some reason I kinda think of it as like two pieces of thread, going in opposite directions but folding into one another and ending up going the same way in the end. "Loop" probably puts that idea in my head, but the "you're holding everything back/and i'm holding everything in" and "it's never enough to remember,/but it's always too much/too forget" keep it there. So good. I like how the 'series of unconnected thoughts' is kinda mimicked as well in the feeling of the poem. It kinda references things obscure to the reader and that seem 'unconnected', but for you, they must be - so the poem is kinda saying, all thoughts are connected, though maybe not at first glance. and maybe I'm just reading into things that aren't there :P Great work. :D
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012   Writer
nooo! I think you did pretty well.

All the pieces do loop together for me, but I got the feeling to an outsider, it would seems like just a bunch of random thoughts.

Thank you <3
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x0xoX4 Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
"it's never enough to remember,
but it's always too much
to forget."
Love it!!
Haha, I noticed that like every other status I post on Facebook is something you wrote xD
I love your work!
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paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2012   Writer
haha, thank you so much. At least I'm facebook famous somewhere in the world (this makes up for the complete lack of love I give my own facebook statuses. as in I never update it ever. It probably feels horribly neglected.)
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x0xoX4 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :D Haha, I hardly update my statuses, but when I do it's usually stuff you wrote xD
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Polymachaeroplagides Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2012  Student Writer
I really like how you worked with your verbs here, using them in an intransitive manner, at times forcing it, and thus creating some kind of emptiness, hollowness (eg. repeat: usually it should be "repeat itself" or at least "repeat something"). I would have very much liked to see whether this could be done more consequently, but it's still great the way you did it.
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