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January 23, 2012
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I wonder if you're still breathing
in the same pattern that you used to
and if your life just picked up
as it was before in a way that
makes me insignificant
and meaningless.

I wonder if there's someone new —
if she speaks in complete sentences
and means it
when she says
she loves you.

I wonder if you're doing better
and if you'll get it right this time.

I wonder,
but I don't really care.

That's the difference
between now and before,
because before
I couldn't forget you
and now,
I barely remember you.
ended completely differently.

something small and in progress
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TsamiTsunami Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love the way you broke this up and in just the right places. Had it been different, I feel it wouldn't have had the same impact. I feel like I'm getting a glimpse into a person's thoughts who really wants to believe the last statement, but can't. They are trying not to care, but the fact that this was still written, with the added mention of the pattern of their ex's breathing, makes me believe this poor soul is in denial. I loved this, very very nice. ^_^
ClothingDoll Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Brilliant :D
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2012   Writer
Thank you!
Awasteof-paint Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2012
this flowed so wonderfully. the last part was just ahhhh. <3
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2012   Writer
thank you. i pretty much can't write lately. so i've reverted back to small little poems and such.
revois Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hmmm. I like the change here. You can sense the attatchment and how violently it must have been severed...fantastic work.
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012   Writer
thank you so much!
TheAnimeButterfly Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you for writing again. Even something small and in progress is lovely. :heart:

I think I'm fond of this piece because I've read all your other pieces and it reminds me of Metastasis. It's still my favorite poem you've ever written. The first, I think, is what did it. It makes me feel like your poems just follow your life story without pause, that you are just taking time to let us into the beautifully written world you live in, and you just leave out bits of the story sometimes. That made no sense, but I don't care because I just hope it got across half the joy I find in your writing.
paperheartsyndrome Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2012   Writer
you are so wonderful and remember pieces that i barely remember. i was like..."metastasis, that's the one with the phonelines right?"(it was by the way so i remember-ish (:)

thank you. your comments always make me feel so happy and loved. <3
TheAnimeButterfly Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2012  Student Writer
<3 You're very welcome, of course.
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